My Canadian Dream...

...is to have at least ONE of the 206 viewers of my post actually comment on it. (begging, I know.) I know at least a few views are accidental clicks from people trying to respond to one of happymf's "fiction" posts. But one or two of you HAD to have read my post? I know I'm not the only compulsive reader here!

Feedback needed! I know the plot is so full of holes it would make a screen door look like Hoover Dam, but it's the formatting, timing, dialogue, etc... that I would like criticism about. Thank you.

Nevermore...
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We are born in an age when only the dull are treated seriously,
and I live in horror of not being misunderstood.
-Oscar Wilde

I know how you feel.

I read it but didn't comment because I know nothing about writing a screenplay, and all the things that would help you to develop your screen play.

I have books about it that I have yet to read tho, if you wanna borrow them.
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I will gladly ravage you Tuesday for a ravaging today...

I have those books too. I haven't read them either...

Nevermore...
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We are born in an age when only the dull are treated seriously,
and I live in horror of not being misunderstood.
-Oscar Wilde

Reading is highly overrated.
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"If you allow yourself to be offended, then you're a bit of [a] nitwit."
(Christopher Moore)

I remember reading the post but not what I thought-
will have to re-read when time allows...

Got my own unread library, too!

i liked it! it was funny and made fun of canadians! i can really only write science paper (and not very well ) so i can't really give any valid feed back but yea i liked it.
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"protestant heaven is in the basement of catholic heaven."
my dad

"there's just one more thing.... it's been emotional." lock stock and 2 smoking barrels

Thanks.
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We are born in an age when only the dull are treated seriously,
and I live in horror of not being misunderstood.
-Oscar Wilde

Re: My Canadian Dream...

Nevermore26 wrote:

...is to have at least ONE of the 206 viewers of my post actually comment on it. (begging, I know.) I know at least a few views are accidental clicks from people trying to respond to one of happymf's "fiction" posts. But one or two of you HAD to have read my post? I know I'm not the only compulsive reader here! Feedback needed! I know the plot is so full of holes it would make a screen door look like Hoover Dam, but it's the formatting, timing, dialogue, etc... that I would like criticism about. Thank you. Nevermore...

Let me be point honest, the story stinks. As for the Canadian angle only you see it. Or have a warped idea about Canadians. Cops aren't allowed to be unshaven, and you can't get jailed for swearing. Besides Canadians can swear as bad any Yanks. Which is a whole new thread, what is with all this swearing ... today. It is disrespectful. ERRR my pet peeve.

Your screen writing pacing EXCELLENT easy to follow easy to see the characters. But there are a lot more camera directions and character notes, that go into writing a proper screen play. Good first try give you a B