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Heather Chandler



Joined: 29 Dec 2006
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Location: Stepford, Connecticut
I'm writing a story, I'd like to know what you think...  Reply with quote  

Okay, so, there's this new story I'm working on called My Darling Salacious, and I'd really like your opinions on the plot.

Here goes...

This story follows the life of young Shavaughnn Darling, who, as a young girl, is forced to deal with her fatherís physical abuse and alcoholism while coming in terms with her motherís estrangement and brotherís drug addiction. Although she may come off as a naÔve, bubbly blonde, it is evident that the lack of love and security in her life leaves her questioning her own happiness. Her attempts of pushing her father away by constantly partying results in her being date raped and hitchhiking elsewhere.

Soon, sheís drawn into a world of stripping, prostitution, drugs, abuse and porn. She also becomes romantically involved with a series of men who scarcely reciprocate the love she seeks. There's Pierce, a drug dealer who was bullied as a teenager for being too cerebral and allegedly homosexual, then becomes victim to further exploitation and pornography after being taken in by Damien Head, a director and former actor of the adult film industry. While Shavaughnn learns to very tentatively embrace her career and makes a name for herself as a porn star, she becomes compelled to endure Damienís aggressive nature and overly sexual tactics.

I've also implicated two short stories, about Pierce and Damien, for readers to learn more about their characters and the reasons behind why they do what they do. It was typically one event that triggered all other bad incidences following. Pierce is sexually abused in high school by a guy named Eric he befriends out of generosity, although he's too mortified to confront anyone about it. Damien becomes despondant after seeing his girlfriend brutally murdered in front of him.

The story is written mostly in present tense, first-person, in the perspective of Shavaughnn (save the pieces about Pierce & Damien). Consider it kind of like a porn star memoir, except not really since Shavaughnn's not a real person. And I've never actually read any porn star memoirs...

What do you guys think? Do you think it's a story that would sell? This is actually one of the stories that I want to get published, so I'm curious to know beforehand.

Post Fri Jan 12, 2007 10:34 pm   View user's profile Send private message
Heather Chandler



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Dude, does this idea suck THAT much? Now I'm feeling a bit discouraged...

Post Sat Jan 20, 2007 10:56 am   View user's profile Send private message
Wonko



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I hesitated saying anything since I don't feel as qualified as many of the other Boardellians who have writing experience, whether published or not. I've never aspired to be a writer, so I can't offer anything more than it sounds like it could be an interesting read. It's a pretty heavy subject which people who don't have some connection to it, don't know much about it except through stereotypes. Yes, many of the stereotypes have an amount of truth to them, and some have quite a bit of truth to them. I think that as long as you treat the characters a shumans instead of letting them become a cliche'd stereotype, you should have the beginings of a really good book.

Oh, and another thing. Make sure it's obvious that this is a fictional character in a fictional story so you don't wind up having some self-important talk show host put you on her book club only to publicly evicerate you when she finds out your book has fictional accounts in it.
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Tal



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What is the conflict?
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Heather Chandler



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It's that whenever things get hard for her, she runs away from her problems instead of confronting people about it, and it just results in making her life worse. It's the same with both Pierce and Damien. Is that what you meant by questioning the conflict? I didn't realize I forgot to incorporate that into my summary...

It'd find it hilarious if someone thought this was real. I haven't experienced any of this stuff in my life so I'd hope not to have people misconstrue it in any way. I'll probably put an afterword by the author type thing or something.

I don't think it really matters if you have experience as a writer, if you're an avid reader, it's good to know if this is the type of material you might consider reading. Any type of feedback is appreciated. So thanks for replying.

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Skribbbler



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Wow, you have a lot of material here and I'd say that gives you a lot to play with. I say go for it. Even if you don't use everything, one idea can lead to another and you could end up with something really great. Given the environment you've described for your characters, you shouldn't have trouble finding conflict on every page. Have fun with it!
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