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Robb's Story & Newest Song

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Miss Betty



Joined: 02 Mar 2004
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Well Robb - let me be the 1st to comment -- babe, you need to leave Iraq!!!! Shocked Go on, leave, we'll wait.

Ok the song: beautiful lyrics - melody runs well, personally, for my tastes I would prefer it longer -- but speaking from someone that does concerts & CDs for a variety of artists -- I could sell it. Very Happy

Now to the short story.... you need to work on the grammaticism, punctuation & spelling - but since you're in a war zone we'll all forgive you. (Everyone turn & look toward Iraq & repeat after me "Robb, we realize you are in a war zone, and have currently been made boss of that crew of miscreants over there, so we all forgive you. This time." Thank you; you may all resume what you were doing.)

As to the story line - deep, baby - it's deep. It's like mental foreplay - followed up by one of "the good orgasms." (Mentally speaking, of course.) Twisted Evil (Can I say that here - who has those Rules again???) Again, personally - I'd have a different ending & make it last longer (something men don't always understand,) but after reading it - I wanted a cigarette. Shocked

BTW- was that irony, making the woman's name Emilie???? Wink

All in all - I'd give them both 2 thumbs up.
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